Saturday, April 14, 2018

Day 14 ~ "Senses Poem" for 30 Poems in 30 Days" #NationalPoetryMonth

So, basically this “Senses Poem” seems like a simple, forthright poem. BUT it is open to a number of variations that can keep you busy with it for quite some time!! You can have lots of fun with this poem. There is no need to worry about rhyming or counting syllables, although it does have other requirements (basically just to “fill in the blanks”) and it can be pulled together in several ways – try each of them, if you wish, or just choose one way to share your poem.

So first, everyone is familiar with the “FIVE SENSES” ~ sight, smell, hear, touch, and taste. 

But many have argued that there are SIX SENSES if you consider your mind ("I think") as one of the senses. 

Hence, we are writing a FIVE SENSES and/or SIX SENSES POEM today!! Cheers!!

Chose a topic and describe it using each of your six senses, one per line/

Here is a SIX SENSES format to follow, BUT feel free to rearrange the order the various senses you use to describe your object/topic.

  1.    I see ____________________________
  2.    I smell ___________________________
  3.    I hear ___________________________
  4.    I feel (as in touch) __________________
  5.    I taste ____________________________
  6.    I think ____________________________

Now, if you want to concentrate on the FIVE SENSES – you can change “I see” to "It looks like," etc.

  1.    It looks like (instead of I see) _________________
  2.    It smells like _______________________________
  3.    It sounds like (instead of I hear) _______________
  4.    It feels like _________________________________
  5.    It tastes like ________________________________

So, you CAN just leave it like it is once you fill in the blanks (in any order using either five or six senses) and remove the numbers; you don’t need those. That will give you a great poem by just doing that.

OR you can remove most of the PRONOUNS, VERBS, and ARTICLES and get a new effect.

Think of a place that is special. Form an image in your mind of this place. Then complete the following statements.

Here’s one example, taken step-by-step.

(I grew up in southern California and would go to the beach every chance I got)  . . .

First – fill in the blanks:

1.       I see ______________   the breaking waves
2.       I smell _____________  the seaweed-tinged air
3.       I hear ______________  the seagulls squawking overhead
4.       I feel (as in touch) ____  the wet sand squishing between my toes
5.       I taste ______________  the salty ocean water
6.       I think ______________  I’m back in my childhood heaven

OK, so, if I remove the line numbers and get rid of the lines it turns out like this:

I see the breaking waves
I smell the seaweed-tinged air
I hear the seagulls squawking overhead
I feel the wet sand squishing between my toes
I taste the salty ocean water
I think I’m back in my childhood heaven 
                       © 2017 Stephanie Abney

And that makes a nice poem BUT, if I remove most of the pronouns, verbs and articles, then I get this one; also a very nice poem:

breaking waves
seaweed-tinged air
seagulls squawking overhead
wet sand squishing between my toes
salty ocean water
my childhood heaven
  © 2017 Stephanie Abney


And that makes a new version of the same poem and it’s pretty cool as well.

OR you can use the other format with FIVE senses and follow the same steps; fill in the blanks, then take away the numbers and even remove the pronouns, select verbs and articles and see what you get:
  1.    It looks like (instead of I see) _________________
  2.    It smells like _______________________________
  3.    It sounds like (instead of I hear) _______________
  4.    It feels like _________________________________
  5.    It tastes like ________________________________

So, there are a few different ways to approach this type of poem. Enjoy!!

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Vicki said...

Day 14~Senses Poem

Mountains are tall around me, stretching to the sky
Flowers are adding their scent to the air
Birds are chirping merrily from morning until night
Wind kisses my cheeks and make them rosy
Sweet berries, flavor bursting in my mouth
All of this makes me feel so happy to be alive

Betsy said...

Bricks and mortar
Baking vanilla from Grandma's kitchen
She hums a happy tune
Her arms wrap around me
Sharing frosted sugar cookies
I am in heaven

(It could have been her bread, too! She was always baking something yummy.)

Peggy Barker said...

A Birthday Dinner

Family gathering home
Dinner cooking in the oven
Several conversations at the same time
Sweet kisses and hugs as they arrive
Delicious green chili enchiladas
Life is good

Heidi Murphy said...

Okay. Mine is here:

Thanks for doing this, Stephanie!

Heidi Murphy said...

Rofl. Everyone else has written such lovely up-beat poems. I'm afraid mine shows my current mood.